My revised thesis statement for Essay 1 is "Changes in status of women in Japanese society from the Meiji period to the Showa period are related to changes in education system during those same periods of time."and the two main supporting ideas for this thesis are as follows.
The second supporting point for my thesis is that as the compulsory education had introduced, the status of women and men gradually became equal.
So if we add the supporting points to your thesis, an effective presentation of the thesis would look like this...
返信削除Changes in status of women in Japanese society from the Meiji period to the Showa period are related to changes in education system during those same periods of time, as shown by the increase in women attending schools from the Meiji period, and the introduction of compulsory education, which further equalized social status between the genders.
By the way, please correct your spelling of the word ASSIGNMENT.
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